Hello everyone , so guys this time we are trying to express feelings through story mode with some poetic flavor. Hope you like it, we are waiting for genuine feedback.
Hinglish-
Plot- Mai is scene mai narrator hun , aur samandar ke kinare baith kar ek papa aur bete ki batien sun raha hu.
Beta- Pita se shikayat karte hue ” Aap to apne bare mai kuch batate hi nahi hai”
Pita ke chehre ko dekh kar saaf lag raha tha ki vo bete ka prashn samajh gya hai, aur fir muskura kar bola, “Chalo papa se phle kya the papa aaj tumko ye batlate hai”,
Pita- “Jo aaj aabru (prestige) bachane mai lage hai,
Vo kabhi izzat ko hath mai lekar ghuma karte the ;
Jo kadam aaj sambhal kar chalte dikhai dete hai ,
Vo kabhi uljat (hurry) mai Abr (cloud) se baatien kiya karte the;
Jo shakhs aaj thaka hua maloom hota hai,
Vo kabhi kamsin (young) umar mai khalish(unease) mai hi rehta tha;
Jo kabhi zindagi apni sharton pe jeeta tha,
Vo kabhi kabhi takalluf (formality) karta bhi nazar aata hai;”
Par mere mulasim tum shayad ye sab sunkar thoda hairan ho jaoge kyunki aise papa tumne kabhi dekhe hi nahi hai,
Par abhi “papa se pehle kya the papa” ye maine tumko bataya hai,
Aur zindagi ke kisi mukaam par tum bhi khud ko vahin paoge,
Narrator- Ye sb bolkar vo hath mai hath daalkr chal diye,
Aur mai bas yhi sochta raha ki kitne khoobsoorat andaaaz mai pita ne bete ko apni jawani aur abhi ka varnan bataya,
Kitna nek hai ye rishta aur kitna pak,
-Deepak Rawat
Hindi-
प्लॉट- इस सीन मैं नॅरेटर हूँ , और समंदर के किनारे बैठ कर एक पापा और बेटे की बातें सुन रहा हूँ.
बेटा- पिता से शिकायत करते हुए ” आप तो अपने बारे में कुछ बताते ही नही है”
पिता के चेहरे को देख कर सॉफ ल्ग रा था की वो बेटे का प्रश्न समझ गया है, और फिर मुस्कुरा कर बोला, ” चलो पापा से फ्ले क्या थे पापा आज तुमको ये बतलते है” ,
पिता- “जो आज आबरू (प्रेस्टीज) बचाने में लगे है,
वो कभी इज़्ज़त को हाथ में लेकर घुमा करते थे ;
जो कदम आज संभाल कर चलते दिखाई देते है ,
वो कभी उलजात (हरी) में अब्र (क्लाउड) से बातें किया करते थे;
जो शख्स आज थका हुआ मालूम होता है,
वो कभी कमसिन (यंग) उमर में खलिश में ही रहता था;
जो कभी ज़िंदगी अपनी शर्तों पे जीता था,
वो कभी कभी तकल्लूफ (फॉरमॅलिटी) करता भी नज़र आता है;”
पर मेरे मूलासीम तुम शायद ये सब सुनकर तोड़ा हैरान हो जाओगे क्यूंकी ऐसे पापा तुमने कभी देखे ही नही है,
पर अभी “पापा से पहले क्या थे पापा” ये मैने तुमको बताया है,
और ज़िंदगी के किसी मुकाम पर तुम भी खुद को वहीं पाओगे,
नॅरेटर- ये सब बोलकर वो हाथ में हाथडालकर चल दिए,
और मैं बस यही सोचता रहा की कितने खूबसूरत अंदाज़ में पिता ने बेटे को अपनी जवानी और अभी का वर्णन बताया,
कितना नेक है ये रिश्ता और कितना पाक,
– दीपक रावत
English-
Plot- I am the narrator in this scene , sitting besides river and listening to the coversation between a father and a son.
Son- Complaining to his dad that “you haven’t told much about yourself”.
It is easily depicted from the face of father that he understood his son’s question and he smiled and said,
Father- Let me enlighten you what was “Father before becoming a father”,
“The one who is gaurding his prestige now,
Was once a shameless warrior ;
The steps which are seen so perfect and calculated,
Was once in so hurry that they seems like talking with clouds;
The person who seems tired now,
Was once a young person who didn’t want to settle,
The person who once live life in his own way,
Was seen doing some formalities “.
But my loved one may be you are shocked as you haven’t met that phase of mine,
But just now I told you what was “father before becoming a father”,
And one day my child you will find yourself in the same place,
Narrator- After this conversation both of them left ,
I was bound to think how beautifully this father explained his present with his past,
And how pure and beautiful this relation is.
-Deepak Rawat
Great..
Write some more😊
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thanks
Surely will😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Described beautifully….Father’s role is no less than mother’s but only few are been able to describe it. You have done a good job.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks😊
Really Glad that you related. 😊
Father’s plays the role of an under rated hero 😛
LikeLiked by 1 person
सराहनीय लेख👍👍👍
LikeLiked by 1 person
Shukriya 😊😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
So beautifully described a father too is equally beautiful like a mother both r required to live a great life. 👌👌👌👌👌👌
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes😄
This creation was to define the story of our unsung hero
LikeLiked by 1 person
Great
LikeLiked by 1 person
Mere paas jo words hai…kam pad gaya…just speechless…😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Shukriya 😄😄
Bss ye Dil TK pahuch Jaye Kafi Hai
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yun samajh lo ho gaya 😉
LikeLiked by 1 person
Bs itna asar ho Jaye vHI Kafi Hai
Kyunki hum sare ussi manzil ke Raahi hai
LikeLiked by 1 person
Itna acha likhoge toh kisi ko bhi acha lagega..😁😊
Woh toh sachh hai..manzil hum sab ka ek hi hai 😉
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sbke naseen mey nhi hota achhe baap ka pyar…
LikeLike
*naseeb
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes brother
No comments on that
As I don’t know the storybehind
LikeLiked by 1 person
very good one indeed
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks alot😅
LikeLike
Good one.. it seems like a script.. please write long instances..
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad you liked
We’ll try from next time
LikeLiked by 1 person
bhaai greatt yrr. love you
LikeLiked by 1 person
Shukriya 😘😅😅 bhai
LikeLike
Great scenario
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks man
LikeLiked by 1 person
I really liked it , just keep writing more . Nice thoughts.
LikeLike
Yes sure I will
Glad you liked 😃
LikeLike
Awesome bhai
LikeLike
Shukriya 😅😅
LikeLike
Really nice and great line…. 🙂 Please keep writing up…..
LikeLike
Thanks alot Bhaiya 😅😅
LikeLike
Very nice story
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks alot 😄
LikeLike
Awesome
LikeLike
Thanks Kajal😄
LikeLike
Bhut khoob likha h bhai jii…. thdi si lines m bhut kch bta dya…i wud like to thank you for sharing me such kind of thoughts…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Shukriya brother 😅😅
LikeLike
Ekdum sahi tarike se aapne papa ka role ko bataya😇
LikeLike
Shukriya
Am glad 😅😅
LikeLike
You have amazing writing skills.
Great work!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks a lot Akansha 😊😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Beautifully brought out 👍👍
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks a lot 😊
LikeLike
Heart touching
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks a lot Kuki 😇😇😇
LikeLike
I am going to read more later
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sure 😇😇😇
LikeLike
Beautiful👍👍
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thans a lot 😇😇😇
Really Glad that you liked it 👍
LikeLike
Great thought and well expressed. Kudos!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks a lot 🙂
LikeLike